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Post by wavemaker9 (Rick D.) on Jan 15, 2009 1:31:58 GMT -5
I’ve learned to live alone
with the chronic dream
of a wisdom with intent
to foster senses seen
through touch recognition
of soft felt
seeming
closely knit
by kindness.
Would that love
be as much
a new sense.
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Post by LynnDoiron on Jan 15, 2009 1:48:48 GMT -5
Rick -- much enjoyed. I kept looking for the play on the title, but there is only a lovely poem to find. Perhaps a new title?
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Post by mfwilkie on Jan 15, 2009 1:49:06 GMT -5
Rick,
Nice poem; would love to see its form work for it.
A couple of suggestions.
I’ve learned to live alone
with the chronic dream
of wisdom with intent—
to foster senses seen
through touch recognition—
soft felt close and knit with
kindness.
Would that love be as much
a new sense.
Maggie
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Post by alfredo on Jan 15, 2009 8:15:12 GMT -5
Rick I too enjoyed this ..very much..wistful/enduring almost inevitable ...but for the title?
Perhaps "Soft Felt"
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Post by wavemaker9 (Rick D.) on Jan 15, 2009 9:56:02 GMT -5
If I changed the title it could not emote knit wit, could it?
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Post by mfwilkie on Jan 15, 2009 10:10:17 GMT -5
I think you might have written a poem you didn't intend to, Rick
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Post by wavemaker9 (Rick D.) on Jan 15, 2009 10:42:11 GMT -5
ergo the title
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Post by mfwilkie on Jan 15, 2009 10:56:38 GMT -5
;D
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Post by Jo Lynn Ehnes on Jan 15, 2009 11:28:16 GMT -5
Sometimes you let the guard down and surprise us. I've always liked this voice of yours, you should let it out more often
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