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Post by wavemaker9 (Rick D.) on Mar 7, 2009 3:37:10 GMT -5
Her prevailing law of emotion,
murmured as a compulsive valve,
presiding over any spontaneous
reactionary gesture this feral
body of want could spasm.
Piquant peaks of luscious lip line
telegraph actions of equal
and opposite reaction
seldom soon enough for this
sympathetic pendulum to follow.
Relative theoretic deductions of
this particular relationship would
lead to an hypothesis that some-
where, in this chaotic universe spins
a planetary body at rest in absolute
indifference, and only God knows where.
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Post by mfwilkie on Mar 7, 2009 5:06:02 GMT -5
Rick, Consider dropping the ly from spontaneous.
I've missed your perception and your wit.
Maggie
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Post by wavemaker9 (Rick D.) on Mar 7, 2009 12:31:14 GMT -5
Thank you Maggie. I've been so preoccupied with "change" its been hard to find the incentive to write. You missing me is a very warm feeling, specially in my cheeks.
Rick
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storyweaver
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Post by storyweaver on Mar 13, 2009 0:00:32 GMT -5
HA! Love this! ;D
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Post by Marion Poirier on Mar 13, 2009 22:13:45 GMT -5
Very good, Rick, except for the run-on sentences and I have no idea of what you are saying - if that's the point - mission accomplished.  Marion |
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Post by mfwilkie on Mar 22, 2009 21:52:20 GMT -5
Rick, Some thoughts on this after reading Marion's comments.
Maggie
Her prevailing law of emotion
murmured as a compulsive valve
presides over any spontaneous
reactionary gesture this feral
body of want could spasm.
Piquant peaks of luscious lip line
telegraph actions of equal
and opposite reaction
seldom soon enough for this
sympathetic pendulum to follow.
Relative theoretic deductions of
this particular relationship would
lead to an hypothesis that some-
where, in this chaotic universe spins
a planetary body at rest in absolute
indifference, and only God knows where.
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Post by wavemaker9 (Rick D.) on Mar 22, 2009 23:19:04 GMT -5
Nice Mags, thanks! Your edit did not change my meaning yet verifies you understand.
Rick
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Post by alfredo on Mar 22, 2009 23:41:18 GMT -5
Interest for me ..captured in the first line, I too like! Though I would hate to be the object of indifference. Shades of Shephen Fry?
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Post by ramadevi on May 25, 2009 9:22:55 GMT -5
Missed you wit, Rick. Too long since i came by here. Interesting thoughts in this one.  Love, rd |
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