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Post by mfwilkie on Feb 12, 2008 18:35:13 GMT -5
a conscious choice to stay in bed all day,
luxuriate in time spent by design—
five piles of books, all just a reach away—
some CD-driven oceanic mind-waves
subliminally fed to catnaps chasing
long dreams between heart attack-enriched ice cream
bowls half full of Breyer's Coffee. It's pleasing
to make this choice, affording nothing
to myself but myself for one whole day.
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Post by LeoVictorBriones (poetremains) on Feb 12, 2008 23:07:40 GMT -5
Here's to living in the moment. Great poem.
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Post by MichaelFirewalker on Feb 12, 2008 23:41:04 GMT -5
Hi, mags----this is nice, a peace-filled piece, quietly presented, describing a day dedicated to introspection and restoration of body, mind, and soul...
I wondered about two things:
the use of the word affording----looked it up, but can't tell from the definitions if it's okay to use it that way or not----it doesn't seem right, somehow...
the other one is that long ice cream line, L6----why did you run that one line way out beyond all the others?----I'm sure you have a sound, Maggie reason----I just can't figure out what it is...
michael
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Post by mfwilkie on Feb 13, 2008 1:07:12 GMT -5
Thanks, Leo. Now if I had some of that wonderful desert wine you brought to Memphis, it might have two days abed!  ~ Affording is used in this sense: To make available and the line in question has 11 beats ending on an unstressed syllable. |
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Post by johnnysaturn on Feb 13, 2008 15:47:13 GMT -5
Nirvana. I'm sure we'd all like to join you.
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Post by MichaelFirewalker on Feb 13, 2008 17:28:24 GMT -5
Thank you, Maggie----I appreciate the explanation..,
michael
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Post by Ken_Nye on Feb 14, 2008 18:10:54 GMT -5
well, Mag, did you actually do this?
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