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Post by David Nelson Bradsher on Mar 22, 2008 11:17:18 GMT -5
Medusa vs. Muse
Your deep eyes, goddess-bright, are paralyzers with a magnitude exceeding reason with the sly and slight batting of lashes, and a look, imbued
with more than beauty’s stare. Medusa was your pure antithesis. Unclosing eyes and coiling serpent-hair provided seekers with a stony kiss
which, dry with hate, returned a man’s investment in a sidelong glance with what clandestine voyeurism earned: a life transfigured in a perma-stance.
I look at you, full-face, your eyes alight, those lashes shaped and curled to flutter, wing-like, to your proper place with muses who create the poet’s world,
a universe alive with fluid music, scored in metered rhyme, a weave of thawing motion to revive the mute unticking of a frozen time.
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Post by mfwilkie on Mar 23, 2008 0:12:36 GMT -5
Nice, David.
Maggie
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Post by Ron Wallace (Scotshawk) on Mar 23, 2008 11:59:52 GMT -5
Interesting, well written and flawless as near as I could tell. Ron
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Post by MichaelFirewalker on Mar 23, 2008 15:25:33 GMT -5
it is the increasing depth of your intuitive insight gifts that I am enjoying here----you tell your truth, and let both the joy and the misery fall where they will, even when you must pay a price----how I do respect that...
michael
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Post by David Nelson Bradsher on Mar 25, 2008 6:49:05 GMT -5
Thank you all. Just one in a series of poems for my girlfriend, The Enchanted Muse.
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Post by Nan on Mar 25, 2008 18:35:42 GMT -5
Very nice, David. I love the usage of poetry within this poem:
a universe alive with fluid music, scored in metered rhyme,
Nan
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Post by LynnDoiron on Mar 26, 2008 18:30:45 GMT -5
That end stanza -- WHOA and Wow. Very, very fine.
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