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Post by MichaelFirewalker on Jan 13, 2008 14:57:27 GMT -5
Oh...yeah.........
now, de way dat ah sees dis heah is dat dey ain' nuthin' in dis uneeeverse moh pow'ful den a woman wearin' all her sex----howsomevah she wantsa do dat fine 'ting, she okay wid me...
michael
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Post by mfwilkie on Jan 14, 2008 19:51:01 GMT -5
And well she should...  I like this, John, just as it is. Maggie |
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Post by mfwilkie on Jan 14, 2008 19:53:15 GMT -5
I was just thinking about the title. Not sure you can't come up with something better.
Maggie
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Post by David Nelson Bradsher on Jan 14, 2008 21:13:47 GMT -5
How about "Power Play" as a title?
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Post by johnnysaturn on Jan 15, 2008 4:24:37 GMT -5
That might be better. But I'm thinking to choose something that doesn't water down what impact there is in the final lines.
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Post by MichaelFirewalker on Jan 15, 2008 15:06:05 GMT -5
how 'bout "Power, Who's Got It, An' Who Don't" ?
michael
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Post by mfwilkie on Jan 15, 2008 15:39:07 GMT -5
What about something like 'dominion'?
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Post by MichaelFirewalker on Jan 15, 2008 17:05:20 GMT -5
get real, woman!...dominion?...dis babe wanna git down n' dirty, an' you gonna call her dominion?
ha!!!
mick
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Post by sandpiper on Jan 15, 2008 17:50:54 GMT -5
aw, and I liked the suggestion of dominion...
although I think it gives it away ...
for the ending, I think you could lose the "that" and have it read just as or a bit more smoothly.
I like!
-piper
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Post by johnnysaturn on Jan 15, 2008 18:32:49 GMT -5
Thaks for the suggestion piper , with which of course I have deferentially complied.
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Post by storyweaver on Jan 15, 2008 22:44:32 GMT -5
THIS is goooood!
G.
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Post by David Nelson Bradsher on Jan 16, 2008 6:37:16 GMT -5
Dang. I liked "Dominion", too. How about (Do)minion? |
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Post by johnnysaturn on Jan 16, 2008 6:43:00 GMT -5
Ever the democrat (small d), Dominion (capital D) it is. Nice play on words, David -almost a poem in its own right. I was thinking also of Ceding , but that's maybe a homonym too far.
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Post by David Nelson Bradsher on Jan 16, 2008 6:47:43 GMT -5
Good choice, Johnny.
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