The True Song of Life (oldie revised)

[ramadevi]

Second Revision:

Dulcet melodies - wind and bough -
Mingle with forest’s hushed breath.
My heart is pressed to pledge a vow
To listen to life, to never fear death-

Allow brilliance to enter each moment.

Sunlight dapples its song upon leaves;
They shimmer, so pleased and amused.
The light invokes laughter along the sleeves
Of forest’s fleeced sheath, so multi-hued

In symphony and celebration

To hear, we must enter silence.
To see, we must look from within.
To love, we must tear down each fence,
Persuade light to shine through each grin

Immersed in inter-connectedness.

Tuned to the rhythm of Truth, (in love),
Aligned with divine harmony,
With unity both below and above,
In freedom, in deep ecstasy—

Then shall we play the true song of Life.

Allow brilliance to enter each moment,
In symphony and celebration.
Immersed in inter-connectedness—
Then shall we play the true song of Life.


First revision:

Dulcet melodies - wind and bough -
Mingle with forest’s hushed breath.
My heart is pressed to pledge a vow
To listen to life, to never fear death-

Allow brilliance to enter each moment.

To hear, we must enter silence.
To see, we must look from within.
To love, we must tear down each fence,
Persuade light to shine through each grin

Immersed in inter-connectedness.

Tuned to the rhythm of Truth, (in love),
Aligned with divine harmony,
With unity both below and above,
In freedom, in deep ecstasy—

Then shall we play the true song of Life.

Sunlight dapples its song upon leaves;
They shimmer, so pleased and amused.
The light invokes laughter along the sleeves
Of forest’s fleeced sheath, so multi-hued

In symphony and celebration.

Allow brilliance to enter each moment,
Immersed in inter-connectedness—
In symphony and celebration.
Then shall we play the true song of Life.



* This is a much revised oldie... used to be a free verse

[LynnDoiron]

My dear friend, you know to use what works in the following and make paper airplanes out of what doesn't and soar them off into a more peaceful space . . . That said, while I see the rhymework you've established out of the free verse, perhaps go for something in between? let the rhymes work internally here and there, rather than end rhymes? or not. But this is a bit of my tweakful play:

Wind and bough's dulcet melodies
Mingle with forest’s hushed breath.
My heart presses a pledged vow
To listen to life, to never fear death --

[Allow brilliance to enter each moment. - replace with]
Brilliance enters each moment I allow.

[To hear, we must enter silence.
To see, we must look from within.
To love, we must tear down each fence,
Persuade light to shine through each grin -- see below]

We enter silence, to hear.
We look from within, to see.
To love, we tear down each fence,
persuade light to shine through each grin.

[Immersed in inter-connectedness.]
Inter-connectedness comes with my immersion.

Tuned to the rhythm of Truth (in love),
Aligned with divine harmony
(below and above) brings unity
deep ecstasy in freedom —

Then shall we play the true song of Life

upon leaves so pleased and amused,
along the sleeves of forest's fleeced sheath,
so multi-hued, laughter invoked by the light
in symphony and celebration.

Allow brilliance to enter each moment,
Immersed in inter-connectedness—
In symphony and celebration.
Then shall we play the true song of Life.

[Ron Buck (halfshell)]

such resonating beauty and spiritual psalm-like prayer. I don't recall reading this before but am happy to have read it now. thank you. you get my merton award for spiritual poetry. tidings, ron

[ramadevi]

Thank you both for your wonderful comments. Lynnie! I love what you've done with this, but it is not my voice. Maybe we can sing a duet? (Very big smiles for you dear sister)!~

Wow, Ron, thank you! Coming from you that is an especially very very high compliment. Thanks my brpther! ~

PS...I've made changes and have posted both versions.