I Just Can't Schwinn (rerun)

wavemaker9 (Rick D.)
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I Just Can't Schwinn (rerun) Jun 8, 2008 23:48:02 GMT -5

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Post by wavemaker9 (Rick D.) on Jun 8, 2008 23:48:02 GMT -5

Let's see,
an inspired love poem to drive my feelings home,
hmmm?

The naked truth about love is,
it’s like riding a bike.
You never forget…
THAT BOBBY STOLE IT AND MY GIRL!

No, not good.

Okay:

The truth about naked love is?
It’s like a bike.
You never forget…
your first ride.

Jeez, that’s even worse.

Okayokayokay:

The truth about riding
a bike naked is,
deceit hurts.

Oh forget it, they can walk home.

Poetic license must not evoke poetic lie sense.

Jonathan Morey Weiss-Namaste47 Board Member We are a group of people, then poets, and finally friends. Posts: 3,944	I Just Can't Schwinn (rerun) Jun 9, 2008 19:37:01 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Jonathan Morey Weiss-Namaste47 on Jun 9, 2008 19:37:01 GMT -5 LOL Rick. Deceit hurts............especially when one rides sans clothes.
	"Through the door of meditation, the imprisoned Soul-Bird of Omnipresence was released. It spread its wings of joy and flew over infinite space, casting cool peace-shadows on unhappiness-scorched beings. Then the Bird of Heaven remembered its little cage of past habits, and folding its wings, lodged itself again behind the bars or earthliness......" Paramahansa Yogananda"

David Nelson Bradsher Admin SITE ADMIN[/b] It is never too late to become the person you were meant to be Posts: 2,186	I Just Can't Schwinn (rerun) Jun 9, 2008 20:16:17 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by David Nelson Bradsher on Jun 9, 2008 20:16:17 GMT -5 Good, better, best. I love the way a good poem will build the conceit and finish with a bang. Great unity of trope, too. Best laugh I've had all day, my friend.
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mfwilkie Admin SITE ADMIN[/b] Posts: 4,644	I Just Can't Schwinn (rerun) Jun 9, 2008 20:54:41 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by mfwilkie on Jun 9, 2008 20:54:41 GMT -5 A terrific ending, Rick!

wavemaker9 (Rick D.) EP Gold 1500 Posts Plus So little time, so much to see. Posts: 1,715	I Just Can't Schwinn (rerun) Jun 9, 2008 23:35:40 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by wavemaker9 (Rick D.) on Jun 9, 2008 23:35:40 GMT -5 Thank you, I had a feeling you guys had missed this one! Nothing is as good as giving friends a reason to laugh! Rick
	Poetic license must not evoke poetic lie sense.

LynnDoiron Board Member Posts: 4,237	I Just Can't Schwinn (rerun) Jun 11, 2008 16:53:19 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by LynnDoiron on Jun 11, 2008 16:53:19 GMT -5 Great! Your humor goes on.
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Post by wavemaker9 (Rick D.) on Jun 8, 2008 23:48:02 GMT -5

Post by Jonathan Morey Weiss-Namaste47 on Jun 9, 2008 19:37:01 GMT -5

Post by David Nelson Bradsher on Jun 9, 2008 20:16:17 GMT -5

Post by mfwilkie on Jun 9, 2008 20:54:41 GMT -5

Post by wavemaker9 (Rick D.) on Jun 9, 2008 23:35:40 GMT -5

Post by LynnDoiron on Jun 11, 2008 16:53:19 GMT -5