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Post by mfwilkie on Dec 28, 2008 10:34:46 GMT -5
Background: Tudor Street to Lawrence Street
to Essex Street on skinny legs that chased the frame
of my father who never let a stranger pass by ignored.
Foreground: Bus rides only cost a dime back then, but
I would have been poorer for their mechanical swiftness
than for stepping out with my father's ease.
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Post by purplejacket on Dec 30, 2008 1:07:21 GMT -5
Not sure if I am interpreting this well. Sounds like, though you admire your father's ease, you wish some was shed on yourself. You're chasing after him, wishing for happy, easy attention.
Or maybe not. Maybe it was there for you, which is why you would have been poorer to not chase along after him. Or maybe both - very much worthwhile to allow his influence upon you, being in his presence, seeing how to be easy with people, even if his attention was elsewhere?
Sorry, I'm very tired, over-caffinated, a little alcoholled, post big-family-holiday-party. Can't sleep, and the thought...
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Post by alfredo on Dec 30, 2008 15:43:46 GMT -5
showing how you appreciated your fathers influence and time spent together....may I say, for me, the best of the Christmas lot.
PS I got the meaning immediately
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Post by Marion Poirier on Dec 30, 2008 21:23:57 GMT -5
Maggie, I don't think you need backround or
foreground. I think in these poems the simpler -
the more effective. It's apparent your dad preferred to
walk than ride the bus, and he spoke to all he met
along the way. (love it!)
Second stanza: you saved a dime each time when
not taking the bus - you could buy an ice cream
with a dime back then. Today a candy bar costs a dollar.
M
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Post by Ron Wallace (Scotshawk) on Jan 11, 2009 12:12:17 GMT -5
I like it as it stands, the mood is fitting and clear, a just right tone of then and now looking back to then. If I hammer long enough, will you consider collecting these in some form? They are excellent their feel and nature. Ron
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Post by Timothy Juhl on Jan 11, 2009 16:01:51 GMT -5
I love the 'foreground' and 'background' intros to each verse. I'm not sure of the ultimate meaning of the poem, but then, why do we have to? For me, there's an emotional reaction to the poem without complete understanding. "Skinny legs that chased the frame"...brilliant.
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