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Post by MichaelFirewalker on Feb 5, 2008 17:03:49 GMT -5
truth is sharp
razor edged
it does not bind
but severs
bone from marrow
thought from intent
it separates until
there is only one
truth is implacable
and blind
it gives no quarter
asks none
offers no mercy
takes no hostages
does not concern itself
with what you think
want
need
or feel
truth is absolute
essentially complete
and stands alone
needing no one
no thing
its single purpose
to reveal
to expose
itself
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Post by alfredo on Feb 5, 2008 17:58:52 GMT -5
So stark/cool ..like its subject...I believe this to be very very good...consider:-
truth is absolute
essentially, complete
and stands alone
needing no one
no thing
its single purpose
is to reveal
to expose
itself
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Post by MichaelFirewalker on Feb 5, 2008 20:23:33 GMT -5
Hi, Alfredo----thank you for reading my poem and commenting on it----I believe that the word "essentially" is the correct one, because it is being used in the philosophical sense----in other words, I am speaking of the essential nature of the way in which truth itself is complete, where its completeness is essential to its existence...
however, I agree with you about the "is", and shall delete----glad you pointed that out...
michael
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Post by Jonathan Morey Weiss-Namaste47 on Feb 5, 2008 20:23:54 GMT -5
I hear you.........believe you took off where I ended, Michael.
Nicely done.
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Post by MichaelFirewalker on Feb 5, 2008 20:27:44 GMT -5
yes, Jon, I did----would love to write more such poems in tandem with you----would like to do some on mercy, judgment, faith, love, peace, etc....whatcha think?----you too, Alftredo, what do you think?
hugs,
michael
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Post by Nan on Feb 19, 2008 21:42:20 GMT -5
...And just think many individuals have problems confronting Truth. I like the phiolosophy in this one, Michael. Well done, indeed!
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Post by Ron Wallace (Scotshawk) on Feb 20, 2008 0:01:58 GMT -5
Very solid, Michael, I like this fire in the voice piece. My lone suggestion is pretty subjective, but I like S8 to keep the listing sound, something like:
truth is absolute,
essential and complete
Regardless, your version works well; listing just fits my voice. Ron
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Post by MichaelFirewalker on Feb 20, 2008 18:07:27 GMT -5
hello nan----your gentle spirit would easily soften anyone's sharp edges...
Ron, no, you are right in that is does sound better that way, but I fear I must sacrifice sound to clarity on this one, my friend----don't do that very often, you know, because sound is so important to me also----am pleased to have your input, though...
John----nothing to forgive----Pilate saw what Pilate saw----and michael sees what michael sees----we are all true...
love ya all,
michael
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