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Post by wavemaker9 (Rick D.) on Feb 6, 2008 1:11:53 GMT -5
She had the look of contempt
only a real mother could love.
Taut-jawed, steely stare,
rigidly entitled, past tense
since the bra burning
rite of passage left
her hanging.
No man was, to her,
the man that they should be,
to the she
they perceived to be
a spear ritual predator.
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Post by David Nelson Bradsher on Feb 6, 2008 6:25:37 GMT -5
As always, Rick, a great play, or plays, on words.  One thing: Taut-jawed |
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Post by Jonathan Morey Weiss-Namaste47 on Feb 6, 2008 10:45:01 GMT -5
enjoyed the word play and double entendre. Nice Rick.
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Post by sandpiper on Feb 6, 2008 13:15:59 GMT -5
gotta love the bra burning left her hanging. too funny.
I'm wondering if the comma is necessary after man..
well done!
-piper
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Post by MichaelFirewalker on Feb 6, 2008 14:29:06 GMT -5
yes, that is how it was----major anti-male attitudes, even among the straight women----most of the movement's feminists were straight women, too, since, of course, most women are straight, so that attitude really was tragic, all the way around...
funny thing is that it is the lesbians who are usually defined by the male of the species as the man-haters----not so----violence haters is more accurate----many, many lesbians, including this one, list as many men among their friends as women, simply because they often find men easier to get along with...
michael
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Post by Ken_Nye on Feb 6, 2008 22:14:43 GMT -5
Rick, I don't think you can let " to she who" stand. "To" is a preposition, and it's object is "her." I know it messes up the sound of that line, but "to she" is not acceptable. (God has spoken. Now he goes to bed.)
Ken
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Post by mfwilkie on Feb 12, 2008 17:05:58 GMT -5
You might want to listen to 'God', Rick.
Too funny, Ken.
Maggie
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