You will be ok...

[Jay Gandhi (engineering poet!)]

Today your boyfriend has told you a NO.
Rivers of salty water will continue to flow.

Questions like WHY ME will slowly drain you.
You’ll listen to Akon’s Lonely as life will pain you.

Then a stage shall come when you whine or move on.
Watch Roadies, Dance-India-Dance or quietly moan.

One day while seeing JOEY you will laugh out aloud.
Then you will go for a Bond movie with the crowd.

A day will come when you will forgive and forget.
You will smile a bit at your not-so-tragic fate.

After sometime you will meet someone nice.
You will be tempted to once again roll the dice.

Today you may be gripped by the helpless unrest
But Jay G believes, whatever happens happens for the…

[Marion Poirier]

Jay, I'll take a stab at this. I think you have too
much rhyme in this one - if you don't rhyme like
Frost of Millay, then a little rhyme is more prudent
if you like to use rhyme. Some of your lines are cliche -
at best - not fresh, so I'd delete them and use less
words. You don't have to spell everything out for
most readers will get it with a more subtle approach. M
My suggestions:


Today your boyfriend has told you a NO.
Rivers of salty water will continue to flow. (cliche)
Questions like WHY ME will slowly drain you.
You’ll listen to Akon’s Lonely as life will pain you.

Then a stage shall come when you whine or move on.
Watch Roadies, Dance-India-Dance or quietly moan.
One day while seeing JOEY you will laugh out aloud.

Then you will go for a Bond movie with the crowd.
A day will come when you will forgive and forget.
You will smile a bit at your not-so-tragic fate

After sometime you will meet someone nice.
You will be tempted to once again roll the dice.
Today you may be gripped by the helpless unrest
But Jay G believes, whatever happens happens for the…