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Post by Ron Wallace (Scotshawk) on May 27, 2009 11:58:23 GMT -5
Hartshorne, Oklahoma (April 17th 1917)
Your bones lie beneath a cemetery wind where I stand on rain-wet grass growing over your stoneless grave,           and I listen… listen for the dark echoes drifting across nine decades;           rifle fire that summoned you to dwell in the ocre tinge of photographs.
Grandfather           I have seen, locked in sepia-toned shades of grey, those Wallace eyes, watching from another age.
I am the son of your son, and I come to find you           not lying in hard ground nor buried in arcane pages, but living in my muscle and blood           your heart moving my legs.
Your eyes looking out from that old photograph were my father’s eyes           now they are mine           and will someday be my son’s peering from beneath his brim pulled low to study dark clouds rolling over our land where he stands listening for echoes.
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Post by Marion Poirier on May 27, 2009 12:26:42 GMT -5
Ron, near perfect poem IMO - personal and filled with heartfelt emotion, but not overly sentimental. I pause a bit at line four and ponder at the stoneless grave. Is there a marker to identify the grave - a plate with your grandfather's name? I am inclined to want more added to these lines.
Marion
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Ron Buck (halfshell)
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Post by Ron Buck (halfshell) on May 27, 2009 13:08:11 GMT -5
I just bent over my soul reading this one... you drawn a humble, piercing line that causes a reverberation... i have no quibble with the stoneless line... I could see how one might think twice there but the blank is easily filled with the movement generated in the work... so for me it is more an observation that fits the tenor of the poem...
as always... most engaging and honed.
tidings ron
go red sox!
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Post by Jonathan Morey Weiss-Namaste47 on May 29, 2009 15:42:41 GMT -5
A message that all readers can identify with, and be proud of. We are never lost to time......but live on in our descendants. Echoes for sure............Kudos, Ronnie.
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