The American Com(e)tose (Jarlsbane 10 Min)

[Ron Buck (halfshell)]

The American Com(e)tose
.

All across the world,

eyes poppin’
ta watch you stride.

Doesn’t matter what you do its just you.

Pinstripe suit, power-tie,
grin-and-bear-it timely lies flamed out.

Gotcha this one, watch me more;
no mistakes: adlibs, portly fibs,
swingin’ doors.

Round, flat, oblong tables,
song of the ages,
and yet we can not pry
ourselves away.

Try, try, try to quick-cut
the video.

What a surprise
there you are;
what just happened
happens again.

The running mill of history
grinds our bones to fodder-flour
as you speak.

Annotated heads on absolved bodies
can no longer savvy the difference.[/size]

[Jarlsbane - Michael Ray Cotner]

Ron

I really liked this... I have such fun writing these timed 10 min pieces.... they tend to flow fast like the thought process and to me there's something about the rawness that gives a presence or power....

I think the lines breaks work well to slow the pace, although i like the frantic pace sometimes.... I would be interested in your thoughts on how you liked writing this way...

this poem works my friend very nicely done!!

[mfwilkie]

I like this, too, Ron.
Think speed thinking lends itself to possibilities control might overlook.

Maggie