Divine Sparks- Glints of Truth (New title)

[ramadevi]

Revision- new title: GLINTS OF TRUTH

Divine sparks
reside in every heart.

They hide behind
our facial masks and busy tasks
but sometimes sacred moments reignite
our inner light.

A blessed soul can recognize
God in any pair of eyes.


Even dirty puddles
in secluded villages
or in city slum streets
hold the vast sky's reflection.

Minuscule dew drops
lacing blades of garden grass
or refuse in a parking lot
mirror the rainbow spectrum.


The holy hum of truth
vibrates every atom.

Kaleidoscopic tunes
and swirling hues
of life's vicissitudes
end on this same note.


An ant, an elephant, an antelope
a human being--


all disguises.


No real difference exists
between the ocean and its waves.


There is nothing
in this world
but God.



Original

Divine sparks
reside in every heart.

They hide behind desires
but reignite
in the focused light of self-awareness.


A blessed soul can recognize
God in any pair of eyes.


Even dirty puddles
in secluded villages
or in city slum streets
hold the vast sky's reflection.

Minuscule dew drops
lacing blades of garden lawns
or refuse in a parking lot
mirror a full rainbow spectrum.


The holy hum of truth
vibrates every atom.

Kaleidoscopic tunes
and swirling hues
of life's vicissitudes
end on this same note.


An ant, an elephant, an antelope
a human being--


all disguises.


No real difference exists
between the ocean and its waves.


There is nothing
in this world
but God.

* How is this title? Should I keep it- or conjure a better one?

[mfwilkie]

Like my first read, rama.

I'll be back after some thinking.

Maggie

[ramadevi]

Thanks Mags - nice to hear from you!
Things seem really slow on EP.
Guess everyone is busy?

[determinedtofail]

Ramadevi,

While reading this, I found myself thinking of an old story I read about a river being parted by a women in a certain profession, by using an act of truth.

Anyways, I see this poem as having a good core to it, but it will only appeal to certain eyes. Think it would be helpful while writing or revising, to picture a bunch of people in different emotional states reading your poem and their responses. Think that would help give this very good core that you have developed a wider audience appeal.

I hope this is helpful, and that I don't sound preachy. Rama, mainly I wanted you to know, that I was not busy, and enjoyed reading your poem.

Thanks ;D,

Austin

[ramadevi]

Thanks Austin!
Glad you were not too busy. ;D

You make some valid and interesting points, but probably most of my spiritual poetry will appeal to a selective audience. I do not mind that! As long as one person finds it inspiring, it is worth writing.
Your review did not sound preachy. No worries.

Warmly,
rama devi

[Jonathan Morey Weiss-Namaste47]

You write my heart, ramadevi.....................I am so joyful about awareness..............your poetry is affirming, all-inclusive, and Truth to this reader.

I like the flow and harmony of "an ant, an elephant, an antelope...."

We are each a wave in this cosmic ocean, neither losing our individuality nor losing our unity with this divine ocean.

Thank you for the gift of your poetry..........Namaste..............and tell me of your arrival on the western shore. With much love......

[ramadevi]

Namaste my dear and cherished brother!

I leave tomorrow morning and arrive in NYC on the eve of the 11th.
will be in touch, of course!

My latest poem - I will post here officially when i have time to also review

Teach me to listen
to everyone's words as if
uttered by Your treasured voice
on waves of parting breath.

Much Love and light,
rd