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[Jay Gandhi (engineering poet!)]

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Throw the serious apple today,
Forget about Paper Washington,
Walk peacefully towards Hajji Ali,
Gaze at the dark sky, smell the wet rain,
Jump in the puddle and make a splash,
Drive slowly on the fast highways,
Write straight from jumbled heart,
Feel the trance through confused veins,
Sip the soothing Ginger Tea,
Pray that the guns are shot dead,
Hope that every star learns to twinkle…

[LeoVictorBriones (poetremains)]

Jay, This poem has promise. A few comments:

Hi my Brain… (drop as it sounds corny and if you are talking or thinking to yourself who else is listening but your brain)

Throw the serious apple today,
Forget about Paper Washington,
Walk peacefully towards Hajji Ali,
Gaze at the sky and smell the rain, (I would be more specific about what type of sky…what type of rain)
Jump in the puddle to make a splash,
Smile, as I think about my soul-mate,

Understand the girl who finds me (I think you meant who I find, again I might be more specific and create a descriptive image)

(Since vice versa isn’t on!)
Drive slowly on the fast highways,
Write straight from my jumbled heart,
Feel the trance through confused veins,
Sip the soothing Ginger Tea, (this is your best line because it’s specific and imagist)
Pray that the guns are shot dead,
Hope that every star learns to twinkle…