Flower

[purplejacket]

Flower

Spirographic petals are most efficiently described
by a structured series of equations -
a chalkboard full of Xs and symbols replotted
on a matrix to return the predicted curls.

Pollen hangs from the erect integral: sperm
on the tip of a flower's penis craning from the origin
into Z axis. The stem pushes it all up
parabolically from our fists.

Those petals weren't always made of plastic -
concave, larger at the base. Without your help
I calculated them into measuring spoons
based on a logarithmic decay, but I did it wrong.

Now if the wind blows, pollen won't drift into a fertile cloud,
just drop like hair from a chemo patient.

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Flower

Spirographic petals are most efficiently described
by a structured series of equations -
a chalkboard full of Xs and symbols replotted
on a matrix to return the predicted curls.
Pollen hangs from the erect integral: sperm
on the tip of a flower's penis craning from the origin
into Z axis. The stem pushes it all up
parabolically from our fists.
Those petals weren't always made of plastic -
concave, larger at the base, getting smaller near the top.
Without your help I calculate them into measuring spoons
based on a logarithmic decay. I'm sorry, but I did it wrong.
Now if the wind blows, pollen won't drift into a fertile cloud,
but just drop like hair from a chemo patient.

[mfwilkie]

Interesting sonnet.

Try breaking it into quatrains to give the readier time to absorb
what it is your saying and seperate out the ending couplet.

Had a thoht on the couple below.

Nice.

Maggie




Now if the wind blows, pollen won't drift into a fertile cloud(
it will drop like hair from a chemo patient.

[ramadevi]

I agree with Mags--- I think it is too condensed in a block this way. Would be easier to read with line breaks. The content is intense enough....give us some breaths in between! LOL

Powerful closing lines

Now if the wind blows, pollen won't drift into a fertile cloud,
but just drop like hair from a chemo patient.

[purplejacket]

Boy, I didn't even think of splitting it up, but I do like it. Thanks.