The Mending

[Jo Lynn Ehnes]

I longed to find another’s touch which held
the power to restore a tattered hope,
to reach emotions long ago dispelled
when hatred’s hands secured a knotted rope.

Within my dreams I saw a brilliant flame
that wrapped itself around me in the cold,
but why cannot existence be the same?
Perhaps it is. It’s starting to unfold.

An ally in this life and far beyond
has made his way onto the battlefield.
My injured heart is starting to respond
and with his breath of love my spirit’s healed.

A miscued vow can leave a life in shreds,
but true love found will bring the mending threads.

[mfwilkie]

JL,

What if you opened and closed each stanza with shorter line lengths? I think it would make it tighter.

Me

I longed to feel a touch which held
the power to restore my shattered hopes
and reached emotions long ago dispelled
untying/unknotting all of hatred's ropes.

[Angel Clementine]

I am very pleased to see an English sonnet written
by someone who refuses to waiver from its
traditional form. For example, I personally do not
respect the internet Haiku that deviates from the
original form of the Haiku, nor do I feel much liking
toward any other transmuting of an established
style of poetry. There are a few free verse poems
that have blown me out of my knickers, but I am
still partial to strict guidelines; I realize that I have
not commented on the actual message of your poem,
but I feel happy for you, and hope it works out
just like in your dreams. *Angel

P.S. Yes, I DO realize that even William Shakespeare
did vary from his more common form of sonnet
writing in pentameter when he penned Sonnet 114,
written in tetrameter; therefore, in afterthought,
perhaps we ALL should be able to bend a little,
or at least, I in some bipolar moment!

[Jo Lynn Ehnes]

I'm kinda like you, Angel, I could possibly write one in tetrameter but I'd never mentally be able to mix the two, just doesn't work for me. I love the sonnet and its pentameter, guess I've just got that stuck in my mind as well.