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Post by mfwilkie on Jan 3, 2010 8:17:42 GMT -5
December's end—Iraq, 2009:
no combat deaths this month.
Inside, the mood is girlie-girl—
pink nails and apple-tinis
dissing on men who might have been
more.
The air is full of hands that didn't vote
for Cheney's front man. Either time.
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Post by Marion Poirier on Jan 8, 2010 12:34:49 GMT -5
Maggie,
I don't get apple-tinis, could not find tinis in the dictionary.
Inside where? Seems like this is a gathering of women
but don't know if the setting is relevant.
Perhaps a bit more clarity; I'm curious to see what comes
next. It seems to be complete if my interpretation
is close with a bit of expansion.
Interesting read.
Marion
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Post by antman on Jan 9, 2010 15:23:17 GMT -5
Hi Maggie,
I too was lost with the apple-tinis and
gave it over to...must be one of those girlie-girl things,
as for the whole of it, I'm ready for the next stanza.
peace and love,
anthony
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Post by ramadevi on Jan 14, 2010 6:34:29 GMT -5
GOod poem, M, but I, too, stumble on apple-tinis, though figure since I am not a girlie-girl type, i wouldn't know.  |
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Post by Jonathan Morey Weiss-Namaste47 on Jan 15, 2010 16:39:08 GMT -5
apple (mar)tinis. Bush both times..........Happy New Year...........
More walk the talk in '10. Peace, Mags.
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Post by LeoVictorBriones (poetremains) on Jan 15, 2010 22:09:24 GMT -5
I like the poem but thinks it needs some more mystery and restraint. A simple fix I think:
December's end—Iraq, 2009:
Inside, the mood is girlie-girl—
pink nails and apple-tinis
dissing on men who
might have been more.
The air is full of hands that didn't vote
for Cheney's front man.
Either time.
no combat deaths this month
but us.
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Post by mfwilkie on Jan 18, 2010 22:30:02 GMT -5
Leo, I like where you put that. Something to thnk about while I'm working on the next one.
Thanks. Maggie
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