Promise Me

[determinedtofail]

Promise me
we won't fall in love

Kiss or hold hands,
make love
or call each other dirty names.

It would innumberably painful
to watch
your lips depart
smiles run dry.

Promise me we won't
become mature
better liars.

Promise me
we'll purely be friends.

[Marion Poirier]

Austin.

IMO, the poem needs a new twist
as we all know that's a promise
over which we have no control.
How about coming from the premise
hat it has already happened. How
you deal with it or your inability to deal
with it would be much more interesting.

Regards,
Marion

[mfwilkie]

I think Marion's right about it needing something.


For starters, the title can be used as a lead in:

Hey friend,

promise me we won't fall in love

and go from there developing the risks.

Re: titles. Be creative. Try not to use words in the poem
as your title.

Maggie