Space Between

[determinedtofail]

Black coffee never says the wrong thing,
never says words to easily,
too late or too soon.

No, the cup rests right there
exactly where you left it last
without judgements, opinions, or choices.

Like the empty space between stars
that waits for memories
to fill it in.

[mfwilkie]

Black coffee never says the wrong thing * A period, maybe.

Great opening line, but both stanzas below say pretty much the same thing, Justin. And the second doesn't really talk about the coffee, it talks about a cup. Call it a dark brew, but not a cup.
Give the image some depth.

Talk

never says words to easily,
too late or too soon.

No, the cup rests right there
exactly where you left it last
without judgements, opinions, or choices.


Black coffee never says the wrong thing
Like the empty space between stars
that waits for memories
to fill it in.

Is the empty space between stars really the right simile to carry the poem?

And what is it you're trying to say? Go deeper.

Maggie