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Post by MichaelFirewalker on Feb 14, 2008 21:28:02 GMT -5
day and night howl
black water rises
twin stinks of fouled oil
and rank silt creep in filthy fingers
paint the shredded edges
of fractured streets
drowned in dreams that sang
where dead fish lie
like arrowed nightmares
quivered tops for slivered shingles
slick with slime where jellied rot
clings on window frames
busted planks and broken doors
splintered two-by-fours
human bodies bloat
blindly float on by
stare with dried out eyes
lips arced wide in rictus grins
before we realize
how grim
this really is
who were they
when they were alive
we never saw it comin’
didn’t see them die
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Post by mfwilkie on Feb 14, 2008 21:41:21 GMT -5
A strong, well written piece with clear language-produced images.
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Post by MichaelFirewalker on Feb 16, 2008 17:21:35 GMT -5
glad you think so, Mags----but tell me, what are language-produced images?
mick
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Post by mfwilkie on Feb 16, 2008 17:37:33 GMT -5
fractured streets
busted planks and broken doors
dried eyes
lips arced wide in rictus grins
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Post by MichaelFirewalker on Feb 16, 2008 21:55:04 GMT -5
sorry, Maggie, but that doesn't define 'language-produced images' ---- how else would one construct an image in poetry except with language?----all images in poetry are produced with language----what distinguishes a language-produced image from any other poetic image constructed with words/language?
michael
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Post by mfwilkie on Feb 17, 2008 2:55:33 GMT -5
The term was a carry-over from an essay. Sorry if it confused you.
I'll re-phrase my review:
A strong, well written piece with good imagery.
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