American haiku (2)

[Marion Poirier]

American haiku series

bold and nimble


april breeze
fly buzzes through tear
in porch screen


spring fever
pesky spider plays
on piano
map

5/21/2010

author's note on American haiku:
the syllable count 3-5-3
would be equivalent to
the Japanese onji of 5-7-5.
American modern haiku
is in free verse can be
up to 20 syllables any which way
according to some "experts"
although commonly
believed not to exceed 17.
As for me, your guess is as
good as mine.

The traditional syllable format that many believe
should remain 5-7-5 is fine as long as you don't
use "filler" words to make up the count.

The following is a link to Lee Gurga's approach:
that IMHO is more subjective than that used
by Jane Reichhold. (I like them both) but follow
more closely techniques used by Jane Reichhold.
(I might as well list her link also underneath.)

www.baymoon.com/~ariadne/form/haiku/haiku.aesthetics.gurga.htm

www.ahapoetry.com/haiartjr.htm

[mfwilkie]

Enjoyed Gurga's article, M. Solid information there.

Jane, as always, a good source for the interested writer.



I like both ku, but find this one the more interesting in its construction.
Will probably read it several more times today.

Have a good day, Maggie


spring morning
pesky spider plays
piano

[Marion Poirier]

Thanks Maggie,

Appreciate the read and response.

Regards,
Marion

[Jonathan Morey Weiss-Namaste47]

I like these both, Marion. The first paints a perfect picture......it is just right..gives just enough with no excessive verbiage (your trademark, right)?
The second is a bit more mysterious, and I can't see the spider playing piano (2 syllables or 3?) unless you mean simply crawling around...........kind of cute. Be well.

[Marion Poirier]

Jon thanks for your comments and for the read.
Piano is three syllables according to the on-line
dictionary (Merriam - Webster),
however, I prefer the revised version.
In free verse, the syllables don't have
to be in exact measure,
17 or under (or up to 20 according to article)
but rarely seen.

Appreciate your time.

Regards
Marion