Friends, With Benefits (A Sonnet)

[solwic]

Any comments/suggestions/helpful critiques are welcome and appreciated.

Friends, With Benefits

I think we've covered all the necessary
rules and regulations of our tryst;
Forget old-fashioned, we're contemporary -
a poster-child for romance, with a twist.

We're not dating; no, we're just committed
to one another when the lights go out.
No feelings, save for lust, will be permitted
when you go fishing for my trouser trout.

And if we start to fall in love, we'll end it;
I mean, who'd want to willingly subject
themselves to pain and torture? No, we'll mend it
by reestablishing our disconnect:

I'll fuck your sister; you can fuck my brother -
that ought to stop us loving one another.

[mfwilkie]

Some thoughts on the opening stanza to fix the 2nd line.

Love the 'serious fun' in this. Nice metrics.

Maggie

I think we've covered all the what is necessary—
the rules and regulations of our tryst;
forget old-fashioned, we're contemporary—
the poster-kids for romance with a twist.

We're not dating; no, we're just committed
to one another when the lights go out.
No feelings, save for lust, will be permitted
when you go fishing for my trouser trout. LMAO

And if we start to fall in love, we'll end it;
I mean, who'd want to willingly subject
themselves to pain and torture? No, we'll mend it
by reestablishing our disconnect:

I'll fuck your sister; you can fuck my brother -
that ought to stop us loving one another.