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Post by Jonathan Morey Weiss-Namaste47 on Mar 29, 2011 10:42:23 GMT -5
clocks move ahead
as our steps lighten
see the robin's breast
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Post by mfwilkie on Jun 1, 2011 11:09:22 GMT -5
Jon, this is great!!! Sorry I missed it til now. Maggie
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Post by Jonathan Morey Weiss-Namaste47 on Jun 5, 2011 12:43:38 GMT -5
Thanks Mags. Marion had posted a few comments but I don't see them any more. I miss what EP used to be, and there are not too many things I miss. I shall keep posting, and I am glad that the site exists in this incarnation, whatever it may be. rama devi posts on Associated Content on Yahoo....her work is maturing so well. Sorry we haven't been in touch, but we are now, and your comment means a great deal to me................Hoping you are better than ever.........Love, Jon.
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Post by Marion Poirier on Jun 5, 2011 12:54:49 GMT -5
Hi Jon,
I received your PM and glad that your book is on its way.
Please let me know when it's out.
I have been concentrating on haiku for the past couple
of years, and hope to have a book of short poetry combined
with haiku out before the end of the year.
I removed the comments on this haiku
because I wanted to give it more thought.
I think it is a very good haiku, only you
have three fragments. Most ELH are written with
a fragment and a phrase so if you could join two of
the lines together with a conjunction or a preposition,
it would read much smoother.
Hope to see a rejuvenation of this site. I miss it too
and hope to hear more from Maggie.
My very best,
Marion
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Post by Marion Poirier on Jun 5, 2011 13:30:40 GMT -5
Hi Jon, Yes, that's all you needed. Very good work!!! My best, Marion clocks move ahead as our steps lighten see the robin's breast |
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