Faces of a Nation

[Dennis Cook]

Faces of a Nation

Tearful eyes,
a solemn look of prayer
as two strangers pass on the street
sharing faces of indecision

The look of parents
watching their children cope
with the pangs of hunger and denial
is sorrow itself

mirrors reflect the sound
of a doctor’s decision

And we watch a sunset ease into
the horizon--illuminating
the faces of a nation,
that wonder,
will tomorrow exist?
.

[MichaelFirewalker]

Hi, Dennis----the images in your poem are interesting, but do you think they're maybe a little too general?---- feel they could benefit by having some more specific details, and being tied together thematically----what do you think?----I am not quite sure what you want us to know here...

michael

[mfwilkie]

Dennis,

I've been studying the monostich lately, and it struck me that if you took your title, and 'wondering if tomorrow will exist' and combined them into one line of thought, you'd have a pretty powerful monostitch.

Maggie

[Ron Wallace (Scotshawk)]

Dennis, first let me say how much I agree with Maggie's idea for a monostitch: "Faces of a nation wondering will tomorrow exist" - powerful stuff. Here's a few ideas for voice. I think the work captures the general hopelessness and dispair that strangers catch in the eyes of fellow strangers. Good, good stuff. Ron

The Tearful eyes,
a solemn look of prayer
as two strangers pass on the street
sharing the faces of indecision

Yet sorrowful is the look of parents
watching their children cope
with the pangs of hunger and denial
is sorrow itself

As Mirrors reflect the sound
of a doctor’s decision,

and we watch a sunset ease into
the horizon--wondering,
will tomorrow exist?