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Enigma
Dec 6, 2007 12:42:13 GMT -5
Post by ramadevi on Dec 6, 2007 12:42:13 GMT -5
Silence hums
molecules mingle and move
raindrops resonate radiance
Everything spins around a core.
Colors sing
manifesting mystery
reality reveals no radius
Our circumference is nowhere.
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Enigma
Dec 6, 2007 12:53:07 GMT -5
Post by wavemaker9 (Rick D.) on Dec 6, 2007 12:53:07 GMT -5
Love this Rama. There is so much here that leads to peaceful meditation. I wish the last line could remain true. After Christmas, my circumference will be everywhere. Ho, Ho, Ho.
Rick
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Enigma
Dec 6, 2007 17:32:13 GMT -5
Post by johnnysaturn on Dec 6, 2007 17:32:13 GMT -5
Numinous. Very nice indeed,
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Enigma
Dec 6, 2007 17:56:11 GMT -5
Post by MichaelFirewalker on Dec 6, 2007 17:56:11 GMT -5
numinous indeed, quite literally so----I am reading your perception of being itself, as you view it from your being within the All----all things are composed of light and emanate light, and as they do, light's colors sing the unending song of creation, as it revolves through and around the concealed point that is the core of all the mystery of existence, the point who is at every point, and all at once...
michael
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Enigma
Dec 6, 2007 18:22:40 GMT -5
Post by LynnDoiron on Dec 6, 2007 18:22:40 GMT -5
must agree with praise offered on this, rama. you use a good deal of alliteration [which i am a big fan of], but, if mine, i might change revolves in transitional stanza to some non-alliterative word -- maybe 'turns' -- I think by doing so it gives other r usages in earlier and later stanzas more punch.
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Enigma
Dec 7, 2007 10:18:55 GMT -5
Post by ramadevi on Dec 7, 2007 10:18:55 GMT -5
Thanks for the nice praises eveyone!
And Lynn dear, I took your suggestion to ehar because it is spot on and i changed the word from Revolves to Spins. Sounds better too. Thanks alot!
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Enigma
Dec 7, 2007 11:13:16 GMT -5
Post by Jonathan Morey Weiss-Namaste47 on Dec 7, 2007 11:13:16 GMT -5
I love the universe dancing with no need for a partner.......lovely alliteration.
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Enigma
Dec 7, 2007 17:10:49 GMT -5
Post by mfwilkie on Dec 7, 2007 17:10:49 GMT -5
I really like this, rama. Maggie
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Enigma
Dec 12, 2007 11:38:15 GMT -5
Post by Ron Wallace (Scotshawk) on Dec 12, 2007 11:38:15 GMT -5
Wonderful use of alliteration to produce a rhythm and a smooth harmonic sound, Rama, I liked this a lot. Ron
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Enigma
Dec 12, 2007 11:59:21 GMT -5
Post by Vasile Baghiu on Dec 12, 2007 11:59:21 GMT -5
You know how to make substantial an abstract idea, Rama. I like it!
Vasile
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Enigma
Dec 13, 2007 7:34:42 GMT -5
Post by mfwilkie on Dec 13, 2007 7:34:42 GMT -5
Stopped in for another read, rama.
Maggie
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Enigma
Dec 14, 2007 12:57:55 GMT -5
Post by ramadevi on Dec 14, 2007 12:57:55 GMT -5
Thank you all for your kind and encouraging words!
I am very happy my muse has finally emerged form a long sleep, though she is still a bit groggy.
This poem came as a nice surprise one evening and was written in about ten minutes!
(Some of my best are like that, they just "arrive")
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