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Post by Jonathan Morey Weiss-Namaste47 on Dec 12, 2007 9:20:25 GMT -5
It's time for year-end celebrations
'midst the food and decorations
I'd simply like to take a minute
to thank EP and all of you in it
for taking time to hone your skills
'tween nine to fives and paying bills,
while sharing strata from within;
encouraging reviews for kin-
since this is what we've come to be
(relationships that one can't see
expand between the lines we read,)
as we hold hands with poetry.
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Post by LeoVictorBriones (poetremains) on Dec 12, 2007 9:35:57 GMT -5
Thank you from I'm sure all others here. Great sentiment. Small change in 3rd stanza to keep the rhyme correct:
since this is what we've come to be
(relationships that one can't see)
expand between the lines we read,
as we hold hands with poetry.
Happy holidays.
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Post by Ron Wallace (Scotshawk) on Dec 12, 2007 11:32:51 GMT -5
Always a class act, my friend, thank you as well, and I really like Leo's idea for a slight change in stanza three. Regardless, you da man, Jon. Ron
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Post by MichaelFirewalker on Dec 12, 2007 16:19:50 GMT -5
I can see the light, shining from your wings...
michael
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Post by PantheUs on Dec 12, 2007 20:47:02 GMT -5
good one Jon
yu'v made me feel the wamrth in a site
Happy Holidays everyone
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Post by Tina (Firefly) on Dec 13, 2007 9:27:21 GMT -5
Hey Jersey Guy! What a wonderfully uplifting poem! It's definetly a kind-hearted card from your heart and made me feel like drinking hot chocolate in the snow by a frozen pond in Central Park with YOU!! :+} It was fun to see a little rhyme here too. Love you, Tina
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Post by LynnDoiron on Dec 13, 2007 21:00:27 GMT -5
Holding hands with you right now, poet to poet -- feels good. Thank you. lynnie
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Post by wavemaker9 (Rick D.) on Dec 13, 2007 21:49:33 GMT -5
Jon, you are the glue guru. May you and those you love have a wonderful holiday season.
Rick
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Post by ramadevi on Dec 14, 2007 12:32:05 GMT -5
Class act, Glue guru, word-wings, a kind-hearted card...
it is all true!
Holding hands accross the oceans and continents.
But i must disagree about the relationship one cannot see (in the select case of you adn me)...because i look forward to seeing you again next spring in New York!
Namaste,
rama devi
PS...the pond won't be frozen in Central park at that time, but we can buy a chai and wander 'round smelling the flowers.
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Post by Jay Gandhi (engineering poet!) on Dec 22, 2007 23:59:07 GMT -5
cool, small poem...
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