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Post by David Nelson Bradsher on Jan 19, 2008 11:21:49 GMT -5
An Angel Sleeps
She dreams in silent, unencumbered peace,
her slumber so serene it heartens me
to touch her sculpted face as she
emits a smile, her body warmed by fleece,
her spirit wrapped in sleep
(and all the secrets dreamers keep).
I lie, awakened by no ache, no sound,
no troubles galloping through mind or heart.
Her sleep is beauty, fragile art,
a pillowed haven for an angel, downed
to die for just a night,
to rise tomorrow, bathed in light. |
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Post by Jonathan Morey Weiss-Namaste47 on Jan 19, 2008 12:59:15 GMT -5
When I read this David, I was reminded of one of my sonnets, to which, by the way, you added some assistance. I'll post it in the study hall........Very nice.
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Post by Jo Lynn Ehnes on Jan 19, 2008 13:51:39 GMT -5
That's beautiful, D. The romanticist in me loves this softer voice of yours.
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Post by mfwilkie on Jan 19, 2008 14:40:26 GMT -5
Absolutely love the first stanza, mon ami.
Mags
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Post by MichaelFirewalker on Jan 19, 2008 15:46:34 GMT -5
in the hours of our day
we must oft look away
from cruel selfish spells
cast up from elves' hells
but during the night
shines a different light
these are the times
we can see
through the eyes
of Divine
michael
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Post by Jarlsbane - Michael Ray Cotner on Jan 19, 2008 16:02:31 GMT -5
Very nice David, i love the peaceful romantic nature of this piece. it is calm and soothing..
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Post by dcpottsmd on Jan 19, 2008 19:40:37 GMT -5
David,
Heavenly, and grace incarnate.
Danny
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Post by David Nelson Bradsher on Jan 19, 2008 21:38:46 GMT -5
Thank you all. I feared it was a tad bit of poetwee, but it was for my girlfriend, so I have to lay it on a little thicker since she's just now getting acclimated to our world.
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Post by ramadevi on Jan 19, 2008 23:15:19 GMT -5
Lucky Girlfriend!
Sweet, serene and special. THe meldoies and cadences are delicious in this...enhanced by your skillful application of alliteration and assonance.
Excellent use of parenthetical comment in first stanza.
Love the closing.
Fine work.
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Post by Vasile Baghiu on Jan 20, 2008 2:45:08 GMT -5
"Her sleep is beauty, fragile art'
A shining line in a good poem, David! Always a pleasure to hear your poetry’s sounds!
Vasile
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Post by johnnysaturn on Jan 20, 2008 9:03:52 GMT -5
Nothing wrong with a good bit of old-fashioned romance. Nicely carried off. And of course in these circumstances you can never lay it on too thick.
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Post by David Nelson Bradsher on Jan 20, 2008 9:26:18 GMT -5
Thank you, Johnny, Vasile, and Rama.
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