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Post by dcpottsmd on Jan 19, 2008 16:54:34 GMT -5
Brisk October blue
calls steel to steel…
swaggering steps,
trembling earth.
A crescent camera moon of flash
points north...
Houndstooth between the hashes.
Tuscaloosa's leaning tower meets the post.
And life morphs into legend.
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Post by MichaelFirewalker on Jan 19, 2008 17:01:43 GMT -5
I like the first four lines----they make sense for a bear----but after that, I'm lost, and don't see any more of the bear at all----help?
michael
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Post by dcpottsmd on Jan 19, 2008 19:20:25 GMT -5
This is my fault, Michael. The poem is about Bear Bryant, Alabama's former football coach. I need to make this more clear in the poem, and maybe the title too. Let me change a couple of things.
Danny
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Post by David Nelson Bradsher on Jan 19, 2008 21:41:39 GMT -5
Great one, Danny. Tuscaloosa and houndstooth gave it away for me. No nits.
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Post by Jonathan Morey Weiss-Namaste47 on Jan 20, 2008 2:45:55 GMT -5
I'm with Michael......But your explanation makes perfect sense.. Sweet home.......................  |
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Post by Ron Wallace (Scotshawk) on Jan 21, 2008 14:45:07 GMT -5
I spotted the Bear in this one Danny, but I admit "steel to steel" had me looking for the furry creature instead for a minute. "Houndstooth" and "Tuscaloosa" redirected me as with David. Good stuff. Ron
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Post by dcpottsmd on Feb 10, 2008 1:38:04 GMT -5
Many thanks, Ron. I felt I needed to clarify a little bit.
Danny
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