Post by mfwilkie on Mar 8, 2008 3:25:04 GMT -5
D,
I took the monostich, Hard Times, and re-worked two
older poems from my ms into this piece.
I'm hoping to try some Sapphics and I need to know of this reads accentual to you.
Dana's essay on accentual verse is below.
You'll get a kick out of who translated Beowolf at the bottom. Tim and Alan.
My second stanza has some alliteration, and I'm not really worried about there not being enough of it at the moment.
I'll probably add to it in revision.
I'm more concerned to know if the tone fits title and POV.
Mags
www.danagioia.net/essays/eaccentual.htm
when the earth rests in shadows from the moon
and pillows are molded to fill a void
for empty comfort, any hope
of easy dreams is a subliminal risk.
when the earth rests in shadows from the moon
shit-storms of loneliness beat back gains
in forward progress. Effort becomes
the pain and re-defines your coping skills
like brushing your teeth with your eyes closed
to avoid meeting the widow in the mirror.
I took the monostich, Hard Times, and re-worked two
older poems from my ms into this piece.
I'm hoping to try some Sapphics and I need to know of this reads accentual to you.
Dana's essay on accentual verse is below.
You'll get a kick out of who translated Beowolf at the bottom. Tim and Alan.
My second stanza has some alliteration, and I'm not really worried about there not being enough of it at the moment.
I'll probably add to it in revision.
I'm more concerned to know if the tone fits title and POV.
Mags
www.danagioia.net/essays/eaccentual.htm
when the earth rests in shadows from the moon
and pillows are molded to fill a void
for empty comfort, any hope
of easy dreams is a subliminal risk.
when the earth rests in shadows from the moon
shit-storms of loneliness beat back gains
in forward progress. Effort becomes
the pain and re-defines your coping skills
like brushing your teeth with your eyes closed
to avoid meeting the widow in the mirror.
