Conned (adult language)

[Sherry Thrasher]

(Maggie's Suggestion)

They were only mind-fucking

She found that absurd.
In fact, she cherished each word
written in rhyme.
He wore Irish wool, smoked a pipe, sipped vintage wine.
They laughed, planned trips to Paris by phone-
Innuendo, typed whispers, together (yet, always alone).
Deep into night, for hours, they sat
uninhibited in their world of late night chat-

We were only mind-fucking, he replied

She sees the ruse of days gone by.
His words blur her mind like cheap chardonnay,
Bitter and unmistakably dry.


Origional


They were only mind-fucking

She found that absurd.
In fact, she cherished each word
written in rhyme.
He wore Irish wool, smoked a pipe, sipped vintage wine.
They laughed, planned trips to Paris by phone-
Innuendo, typed whispers, together (yet, always alone).
Deep into night, for hours, they sat
uninhibited in their world of late night chat-

We were only mind-fucking, he replied

She sees the ruse of days gone by.
His taste fills her mouth like cheap chardonnay,
Bitter and unmistakably dry.

[Angel Clementine]

Kudos for your decision to post this poem, Sherry. Your knack for rhythm comes through in this one; but more importantly your strong elements expressing "her" feelings, along with the metaphorical usage of "his taste" and "cheap Chardonnay", makes "her" reaction of attitude so very clear. _Angel

[mfwilkie]

I like this a lot, Sherry-Berry.

One thought on the middle line of the stanza below:

She sees the ruse of days gone by.
His taste fills her mouth like cheap chardonnay,
Bitter and unmistakably dry.

His words blur her mind like cheap chardonnay,
bitter and unmistakably dry.

Nice, nice, nice.

Magpie

[David Nelson Bradsher]

Glad you posted it, Sherry. It has the metallic taste of bitterness...and I like it.

[Sherry Thrasher]

Thanks. Magpie, I'll think on it. Sounds good but I'm rolling it around. But I do like the thought of the words idea.

Sherry

[Jonathan Morey Weiss-Namaste47]

Pretty edgy, Sherry. She really did get mind-fucked..........poor thing. In actuality, she did get fucked (over.)
Good set-up for the final blow
Nice piece Sherry.............seriously.

[Sherry Thrasher]

Thanks guys.

[wavemaker9 (Rick D.)]

I hope next time she uses con traceptives. Internet relating has its shortcomings.
Fricken whino. Who the _____ does he think he is!

[Sherry Thrasher]

Never tell but he drank Yellow Tail. God awful.

Any thoughts on Mag's suggestion?

[wavemaker9 (Rick D.)]

His words fill her mind like cheap chardonnay,
Bitter and regretably uncorked.

[Jarlsbane - Michael Ray Cotner]

very nicely done... well written and a powerful confessional that the reader can relate to... Should invoke feelings of both introspection and outrage... good write. -- Jarls